Grammatical Correctness

[Acetronics2]

Hi, Luciano,

American citizens speak English nowadays ... that's really THE news !!!


Yankee

Senior Member
Joined on 15-04-2006
Connecticut, USA

...

Find something a bit more serious ...

Alain

[T.Jackson]

Forget about www.englishforums.com ....
There's plenty of scholars on here that can assist.

[T.Jackson]

This dynamic, highly sought after system, will be primarily geared towards helping Clem’s Real Estate business achieve, some highly desired, radical new expansion. The system will enable Clem and his team to streamline and collate virtually all aspects of the business into one tightly wrapped, neat little package. It is expected that, with the aid of the new system, productivity will be on the rise while overall organization will be taken to a whole new realm. A new breed of client is on the way with the plans for a website.

Currently the business offers residential property that is either for sale or for rent. This includes apartments, units & houses. The business also caters for an administration service for body corporate management of apartments and units. As its stands, Clem has a total of 4 agents working for him, with 2 agencies in Victoria, but with the view for expansion in mind, this could all very well change. Clem & his team constantly deal with contracts between tenant, vendor & landlord, a long with other sundry forms of office paper work such as invoices – namely for body corporate management.

At the moment the business is using Microsoft Word & Excel to handle basically all aspects of the operation. It is not the intentions of the system to redefine the way in which the business is run, but rather to concentrate on streamlining the operation so that the business can perform more efficiently. It is expected that the website will be beneficial in providing many new client leads, and at the same time be responsible for improved, existing customer satisfaction. People will be given a “birds eye” view of the properties on the site a long with descriptions that will result in a more informed client at the start. Agents may indeed find themselves spending much less time with inspections as a result.

Could this be better worded? - I think it could. Any suggestions?

[Luciano]

Hi Trent,

I am glad you tested Englishforums.com.

http://www.englishforums.com/English...zbxgl/Post.htm

Best regards,

Luciano

[Acetronics2]

Are there some English people working for this site ???


<< Barbara, who gives answers from the American English point of view. >>

she's honest ...


really Funny !!!

That should be called " Americanforum.com" ...

Alain

[T.Jackson]

Hi Trent,

I am glad you tested Englishforums.com.

http://www.englishforums.com/English...zbxgl/Post.htm

Best regards,

Luciano

That is an excerpt from one of my most recent UNI assignments. I agree that there's three too many commas in the first paragraph. Of course a professional writer is going to find something to pick on with anything that I can come up with.

[T.Jackson]

72% for that assignment. Few too many commas perhaps. But then again, I have to admit, there was about 30% that I really didn't understand.